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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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Studying
English
 is generally perceived as more essential and has a lot more urgency than a native local
language
 subject as
English
 is deemed as a global
language
.
Consequently
,
this
 results in
the
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 diminishing number of local
language
 speakers.
Although
 learning
English
 is still quite important, it has many other mediums that can contribute to the
language
 introduction.
Hence
,
this
 essay will elaborate on the urgency for more attention towards the preservation of native languages in both school and everyday life and some potential efforts needed to preserve them.
Firstly
, access to
English
language
-based media
are
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 massive as it is a global
language
. The wide variety of options enables those who want to learn
English
by
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 easily
accessing
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 them and be exposed to the content every day. Concurrently, the opposite is happening in the case of local indigenous
language
 which is most likely to have
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 limited number of media and native speakers for anyone to learn.
This
 shows that
the
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 number of media gap needs to be filled to accommodate the local
language
 learning process.
In addition
, the view of
English
 as a global
language
also
 contributes to the perception of how
English
 is more useful as a
language
 compared to any local
language
 as it can help someone to find a job, especially in a foreign company. To combat similar perceptions, there is a need for the government to create a narrative about how the same companies will
also
 seek native local
language
 speakers as the company will
also
 need to communicate with local stakeholders.
This
 notion gives insight
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 how the perception can
also
 be changed using a narrated campaign to motivate everyone to preserve their local
language
 and the benefits that come with learning them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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