IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Some people claim that human activities cause global warming, while others believe it is a natural phenomenon. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There are polarized opinions on whether human activities or natural phenomena render global warming. From a personal perspective, two opinions are completely convincing and
this
Linking Words
 essay shall elaborate my justifications. It is undeniable that increasing global temperatures can be attributed to natural causes
such
Linking Words
 as volcanic eruptions and the alteration of solar radiation. Given that the eruption of volcanoes releases volumes of greenhouse gasses
such
Linking Words
 as carbon dioxide
as well as
Linking Words
 sulfur dioxide into the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
, which can trap heat and warm the planet.
According to
Linking Words
 the research of the scientists in the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change(
IPCC)
Add a comma
IPCC),
show examples
 the sun becomes increasingly bigger and creates high levels of radiation, which affect the Earth’s
atmosphere
Use synonyms
 in recent years.
Although
Linking Words
 natural causes of global warming typically occur slowly and over long periods of time, they could still contribute to rising temperatures on the planet. Another noteworthy point to discuss is that the result of global warming would be human actions. Indeed, when people drive vehicles
such
Linking Words
 as cars, motorbikes, and planes, fossil fuels are burned in order to continuously operate these vehicles,
hence
Linking Words
 toxic gasses including petrol oil are emitted into the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
, forests are called the green lungs of the Earth, which
also
Linking Words
 maintain the balance of oxygen and carbon dioxide in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
. Ergo human activities including deforestation
mitigates
Change the verb form
mitigate
show examples
 the Earth's ability to absorb CO2 from the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
 and
contributes
Change the verb form
contribute
show examples
 to global warming. In conclusion, both natural features and human activities can cause climate change, which is likely to be one of the biggest threats to our planet with numerous
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
adverse effects including extreme weather events and rising sea levels

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details that are logically connected.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear thesis statement in the introduction and summarize the main points in the conclusion.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary by using more specific and varied words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to verb tenses and the correct use of grammar structures.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • human activities
  • natural phenomenon
  • greenhouse gases
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrial processes
  • agriculture
  • volcanic eruptions
  • solar radiation
  • climate cycles
  • contribute to
  • main cause
  • exact contributions
  • significant role
What to do next:
Look at other essays: