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Some people claim that human activities cause global warming, while others believe it is a natural phenomenon. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
There are polarized opinions on whether human activities or natural phenomena render global warming. From a personal perspective, two opinions are completely convincing and
this
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 essay shall elaborate my justifications.
Body paragraph 1
It is undeniable that increasing global temperatures can be attributed to natural causes
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 as volcanic eruptions and the alteration of solar radiation. Given that the eruption of volcanoes releases volumes of greenhouse gasses
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 as carbon dioxide
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 sulfur dioxide into the
atmosphere
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, which can trap heat and warm the planet.
According to
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 the research of the scientists in the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change(
IPCC)
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 the sun becomes increasingly bigger and creates high levels of radiation, which affect the Earth’s
atmosphere
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 in recent years.
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 natural causes of global warming typically occur slowly and over long periods of time, they could still contribute to rising temperatures on the planet.
Body paragraph 2
Another noteworthy point to discuss is that the result of global warming would be human actions. Indeed, when people drive vehicles
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 as cars, motorbikes, and planes, fossil fuels are burned in order to continuously operate these vehicles,
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 toxic gasses including petrol oil are emitted into the
atmosphere
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.
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, forests are called the green lungs of the Earth, which
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 maintain the balance of oxygen and carbon dioxide in the
atmosphere
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. Ergo human activities including deforestation
mitigates
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mitigate
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 the Earth's ability to absorb CO2 from the
atmosphere
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 and
contributes
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contribute
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 to global warming.
Conclusion
In conclusion, both natural features and human activities can cause climate change, which is likely to be one of the biggest threats to our planet with numerous
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adverse effects including extreme weather events and rising sea levels

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • human activities
  • natural phenomenon
  • greenhouse gases
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrial processes
  • agriculture
  • volcanic eruptions
  • solar radiation
  • climate cycles
  • contribute to
  • main cause
  • exact contributions
  • significant role
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