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The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008.

The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008.
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The chart above illustrates the levels of
unemployment
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 and the
number
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 of
people
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 that leave a country in the period from 1988 to 2008.
This
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 country is
Ireland
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.
Overall
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, the
unemployment
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 rate was about 17% in 1988, decreased to about 5% in 2000, achieving about 10% in 2008.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 leaving
Ireland
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 started at 40,000 in 1998, increased to almost 70,000 in 1990,
then
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 depicted a decrease and after reached a plateau from the 1990s to 2004, when there was a new increase, achieved 45,000
people
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 in 2008. It is possible to identify a correlation between
unemployment
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 and migration. Generally, when
unemployment
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 falls, the
number
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 of Irish
people
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 leaving the country falls
also
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. When
unemployment
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 grows, the
number
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 of
people
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 leaving
Ireland
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 is bigger. Analyzing these 20 years, from 1988 to 2008, it is possible to affirm that the amount of emigrants from
Ireland
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 has not changed a lot,
however
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, the
unemployment
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 rate presented an improvement.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, number, people, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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