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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph indicates the
amount
 of
money
 paid for a
stock
 of four different high-tech companies
Facebook
, Google,
Apple
,
Yahoo
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and Yahoo
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 over a
period
 of 6 years.
Overall
, the
stock
value
 of
Apple
 fluctuated constantly during the
period
 shown,
while
 Google’s
stock
price
 almost remained unchanged.
Besides
, the
amount
 of
money
 spent on
a
Correct article usage
the
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stock
 of
Facebook
 climbed constantly and the
stock
price
 of
Yahoo
 dropped continuously during the
period
 shown. In 2011, the
stock
value
 of
Apple
 was worth 5000
USD
 per
one
. In the same year, the
amount
 of
money
 spent on
stock
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the stock
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 of
Facebook
 and
Yahoo
 was 9000
USD
. Google was the company
that
Correct word choice
where
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 the
stock
value
 was priced lowest
with
Change preposition
at
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 about 2000
USD
 per
a
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apply
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stock
.
One
 year later, the
stock
price
 of
Apple
 increased enormously and reached a peak of about 34000
USD
 per
one
. From 2012 to 2015, the
stock
value
 of
Apple
 company declined significantly and
also
 hit a low of about 4000
USD
 for a
stock
. During 5 years, the
stock
price
 of
Facebook
 rose constantly and took the lead with about 20000
USD
 for
one
stock
 in 2016. In the same
period
, the
amount
 of
money
 paid for a
stock
 of
Yahoo
fall
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fell
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 considerably and the
stock
value
 in 2016 ended at around 3000
USD
 per
one
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, stock, facebook, apple, yahoo, period, value, price, usd, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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