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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph indicates the
amount
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 of
money
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 paid for a
stock
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 of four different high-tech companies
Facebook
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, Google,
Apple
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,
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Yahoo
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and Yahoo
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 over a
period
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 of 6 years.
Overall
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, the
stock
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value
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 of
Apple
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 fluctuated constantly during the
period
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 shown,
while
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 Google’s
stock
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price
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 almost remained unchanged.
Besides
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
a
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the
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stock
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 of
Facebook
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 climbed constantly and the
stock
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price
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 of
Yahoo
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 dropped continuously during the
period
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 shown. In 2011, the
stock
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value
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 of
Apple
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 was worth 5000
USD
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 per
one
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. In the same year, the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
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stock
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 of
Facebook
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 and
Yahoo
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 was 9000
USD
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. Google was the company
that
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where
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 the
stock
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value
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 was priced lowest
with
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at
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 about 2000
USD
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 per
a
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apply
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stock
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.
One
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 year later, the
stock
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price
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 of
Apple
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 increased enormously and reached a peak of about 34000
USD
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 per
one
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. From 2012 to 2015, the
stock
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value
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 of
Apple
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 company declined significantly and
also
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 hit a low of about 4000
USD
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 for a
stock
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. During 5 years, the
stock
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price
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 of
Facebook
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 rose constantly and took the lead with about 20000
USD
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 for
one
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stock
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 in 2016. In the same
period
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 paid for a
stock
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 of
Yahoo
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fall
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 considerably and the
stock
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value
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 in 2016 ended at around 3000
USD
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 per
one
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, stock, facebook, apple, yahoo, period, value, price, usd, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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