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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.
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The given chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of the population who lives in
cities
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 in various
part
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 of the world.
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 it can be seen that
Africa
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 had the lowest percentage
city
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of city
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 inhabitants in 1951
while
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 living in
cities
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 held so much appeal among North American residents in 2007 and 2015. Looking
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details
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, in 1950,
Africa
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 had the lowest
proportion
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 with 15% of residents percentage in
cities
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 and Asia was slightly higher than
Africa
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 with 17%.
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, North America hit a high of 64% in the same year. In 2007, almost all countries experienced a significant rise in their
proportion
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.
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Africa
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 and Asia increased more than double. Regarding
future
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, in 2015, the majority of all countries will live in urban areas. Europe, Latin America,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 and North America will witness
significant
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a significant
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proportion
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 of people who live in
cities
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 with 84%, 89% and 90% respectively. The rest of
countries
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the countries
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 will remain between 62% and 76% in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, cities, africa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • regions
  • trends
  • global
  • increase/decrease
  • patterns
  • compare/contrast
  • noteworthy
  • industrialization
  • economic factors
  • migration
  • government policies
  • bar chart illustrates
  • overall trend
  • noticeable
  • particularly
  • summarize
  • highlight
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