The government should allocate more funds to the educational sector than health sector. To what extent do you agree or disagree
The authority must spend more funds
in
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on
education
facilities than Use synonyms
health
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department
. In my opinion, Fix the agreement mistake
departments
both
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health
and Use synonyms
education
are important in every country. Use synonyms
However
, spending more money in one area than the other can be significantly dangerous. Linking Words
Therefore
, I believe every country should monitor Linking Words
their need
before making Fix the agreement mistake
its needs
the
spending Correct article usage
a
plan
.
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Firstly
, the government should have statistics about Linking Words
both
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health
and Use synonyms
education
before allocating more funds Use synonyms
in
one area than the other. Statistics will provide data Change preposition
to
that is
needed to calculate the income and the spending of Linking Words
both
departments. Use synonyms
Thus
, the government will be aware of which Linking Words
department
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need
more money. Taking online shopping Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
for example
, the owners of the website spend more Linking Words
in
designing rather than Change preposition
on
speding
on Correct your spelling
spending
the
advertising which eventually Correct article usage
apply
led
them to failure, because of their lack of awareness of which area they need to improve.
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, after making the spending Linking Words
plan
the authority now Use synonyms
have
to monitor the two sectors for Correct subject-verb agreement
has
better
future. Correct article usage
a better
Meaning
that the spending percentage of one sector may increase Wrong verb form
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due to
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need
or any other factors. To illustrate, student numbers may increase in the next five years and the patients of hospitals will remain the same. Fix the agreement mistake
needs
Hence
, the Linking Words
goverment
must spend more Correct your spelling
government
in
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on
education
because the number of students is increasing Use synonyms
while
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the same. As I see, monitoring Correct your spelling
remains
both
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medical
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the medical
department
and Use synonyms
academic
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the academic
department
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department
itself but Use synonyms
also
the economy of the country Linking Words
due to
financial management.
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of
making more funds in Change preposition
with
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the eduaction
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sector than Correct your spelling
education
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health
sector before making the spending Correct article usage
the health
plan
. Use synonyms
Moreover
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government
must collect statistics Add an article
the government
of
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from
both
sectors, Use synonyms
that
will lead Correct pronoun usage
which
for
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to
better
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a better
plan
. Use synonyms
Additionally
, authorities should always monitor their departments for Linking Words
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future.Correct article usage
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