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Band 5

Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, our earth faces global warming
hence
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 many scientists suggest
to find
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 an alternative
of
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 fossil
fuel
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fuels
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. Many people choose solar energy because it is
environment
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 friendly.
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solar
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the solar
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cell
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 is renewable energy, there are undeniable disadvantages to it.
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to install a solar
cell
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, there is a requirement
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 a big
space
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 for
the
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apply
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sun
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 exposure. As
population
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the population
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 increase,
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the availibility
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availibility
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availability
 of the land
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also
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is also
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 limited. Sometimes, it can be challenging to find an adequate
space
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, especially in the less-spacious residential areas.
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, in
the
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 crowded island like Java, there is
no
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 enough
space
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 for installing solar
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cell
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cells
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.
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, big
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also
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 means high cost since the price of the land is quite expensive.
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, the solar
cell
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 has a high
dependancy
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dependency
dependence
 on
the
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apply
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sunlight to produce power for
the
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apply
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electricity. It may be difficult for countries which have less
sun
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 during one year, especially
non tropical
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 countries.
Eventhough
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Even though
 technology has advanced and there is a new material, the price will be very expensive
compare
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 with the electricity that
produced
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is produced
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.
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,
Switszerland
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Switzerland
 country which
experience
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extreme
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 low temperature and less
sun
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 exposure will not
applicable
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be applicable
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 for
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the installment
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installment
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 of
solar
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the solar
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cell
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due to
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 lack of sunlight.
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, subtropical countries need to find another renewable energy as
alternative
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 when there is no
sun
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.
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,
eventhough
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even though
 solar
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cell
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cells
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more
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are more
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environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly than fossil
fuel
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fuels
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,
it
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they
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 still have some
weakness
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weaknesses
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. In my opinion, the disadvantages of solar
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cell
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cells
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outweight
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outweigh
its
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their
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 advantages, especially in
term
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terms
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 of
space
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 and weather.
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, installing solar
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cell
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cells
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also
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 requires a high cost
hence
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 it is not suitable for people with low to medium income.

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task response
Your essay addresses the topic and presents both the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy. However, you could provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. However, you could improve the overall coherence and cohesion by organizing your ideas more logically.
lexical resource
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, but be careful with your word choice and grammar to avoid ambiguity and improve clarity.
grammatical range
Your grammar is generally accurate, but there are some errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Review your grammar to ensure greater precision and coherence.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • inexhaustible
  • renewable energy
  • mitigating
  • initial setup cost
  • long-term savings
  • low maintenance
  • remote and rural areas
  • socio-economic development
  • intermittent
  • storage technologies
  • toxic materials
  • recycling and disposal mechanisms
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • fossil fuels
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