The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, the USA and other countries.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, the USA and other countries.
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The bar chart compares data
of
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the sale of hybrid vehicles
though
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throughout
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the globe in 3 countries from 2006 to 2009
Overall
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,
from
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the
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first glance can be seen that
,
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the highest rate
had
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US
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the US
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almost at all periods of time,
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nevertheless
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in
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last
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the last
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one Japan overran
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the USA
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.
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, the lower
sales
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showed Japan and
other
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others
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.
Initially
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, Japan witnessed
niglible
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negligible
eligible
sales
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with
orthe
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other
countries for 3
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year
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. In 2006 sold just more than 50.000 cars and in
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the next
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year
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increased
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15.000 and in
additional
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year
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25.000 units.
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,
in
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last
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year
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it almost tripled
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its
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sales
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at 320.000 purchases
while
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,
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other
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had just over 100.000
sales
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.
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,
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started in 2006
from
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250.000 and in
next
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the next
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year
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plummet
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plummeted
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it's
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number for
additional
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an additional
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200.000. Having
showen
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shown
its peak
im
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in
2008
sales
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decreased
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fewer than 100.000 and
for
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22.000 in
last
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year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, nevertheless".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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