You brought mobile phone from wallmart store recently it is no longer working properly write a letter to the manager
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to regarding the problem of mobile phone
that I brought from your store.
I bought this
mobile phone
as my son's birthday present ,it seems wonderful but now it become a nightmare for me.Because the mobile phone
is no longer working.For example
,when I call my son,he cannot hear me and he also
cannot receive messages from others,we have tried a lot of solutions but they did not work.
I would like to request you to change a new phone
for me or refund the money because this
product is still in the warranty period or maybe we can discuss a solution.Although
it is not a good experience for me but
I would give u a chance to solve the problem.
Remove the conjunction
apply
In addition
to this
，I think that you should check your product quality and make sure the product can be used longer.
I am looking forward to your reply
Sincerely,
JIA HUISubmitted by ggrunrunderr on
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