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The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.

The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.
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The given table illustrates the seven aspects that
the
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Australian
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Australians
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 both in a single status and a
couple
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couple of
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 relationship spend their
money
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 on after they
decided
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decide
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 to retire from working. Generally speaking, a retired single person
observe
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observes
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favoring
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favouring
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 on housing the most,
while
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 a retired couple
spend
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spends
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 their
money
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 mostly on leisure activities. For
an
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Australian
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Australians
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 staying in a single status, they spend most of their
money
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 on housing, making up 184
Dollars
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.
Following
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this
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, the second aspect that they decide to spend
money
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 on is leisure activity, which is 140
Dollars
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. Health and transport
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also
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are also
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record
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recorded
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 as popular aspects that a single person in
Australian
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Australia
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spend
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spends
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 their
money
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 on, with 122
Dollars
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 for the former and 107
Dollars
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 for the latter. To give more detail,
for
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a retired couple in Australia,
they
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choose
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chose
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 to spend their
money
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 on leisure activities as their first
priotity
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priority
, which is 202
Dollars
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.
Moreover
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, housing still
rank
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ranks
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 as the second aspect that they decide to spend their
money
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 on, making up 194
Dollars
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,
while
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 health
also
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 another
apect
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aspect
 that they spend their
money
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 on, which is 177
Dolars
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Dollars
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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