The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.
The given table illustrates the seven aspects that
the
Correct article usage
apply
Australian
both in a single status and a Correct your spelling
Australians
couple
relationship spend their Add the preposition
couple of
money
on after they decided
to retire from working. Generally speaking, a retired single person Wrong verb form
decide
observe
Change the verb form
observes
favoring
on housing the most, Change the spelling
favouring
while
a retired couple spend
their Change the verb form
spends
money
mostly on leisure activities.
For an
Correct article usage
apply
Australian
staying in a single status, they spend most of their Correct your spelling
Australians
money
on housing, making up 184 Dollars
. Following
this
, the second aspect that they decide to spend money
on is leisure activity, which is 140 Dollars
. Health and transport also
Add a missing verb
are also
record
as popular aspects that a single person in Replace the word
recorded
Australian
Correct your spelling
Australia
spend
their Correct subject-verb agreement
spends
money
on, with 122 Dollars
for the former and 107 Dollars
for the latter.
To give more detail, for
a retired couple in Australia, Change preposition
apply
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
choose
to spend their Wrong verb form
chose
money
on leisure activities as their first priotity
, which is 202 Correct your spelling
priority
Dollars
. Moreover
, housing still rank
as the second aspect that they decide to spend their Correct subject-verb agreement
ranks
money
on, making up 194 Dollars
, while
health also
another apect
that they spend their Correct your spelling
aspect
money
on, which is 177 Dolars
.Correct your spelling
Dollars
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