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Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification.

#university #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualification
The question of whether university
students
 should focus solely on their main
subjects
 or explore a variety of
subjects
 is a matter of personal preference and depends on individual circumstances.Both approaches have their merits, and
students
 should consider their goals,
interests
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 when making a decision. On one hand,there are valid arguments for
students
in
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 spend all their time and attention
to
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studying for their qualifications .
This
 way allows them to specialize in their chosen field and improve their knowledge in that
subject
,
For example
 in High school,
students
 only
study
 some
subject
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subjects
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 like Math, English,Literature and one
subject
 which was chosen
by
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for
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their
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them
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 to specialize
.
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in.
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 Another reason,
study
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studying
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main
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the main
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subjects
also
help
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helps
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they
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them
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 to reduce
time
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their time
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study
, less pressure,
For example
 , in class ,
instead
 of studying 9
subjects
in
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 the same time , now
i
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 just need to
study
 3 mandatory
subjects
 and one
subject
 that i
good
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 at. On
other
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the other
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 hand, there are several benefits to exploring different
subjects
 alongside the main area of
study
.
Firstly
,
learn
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learning
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 about different
subjects
in addition
 to their main
subjects
 can help them improve their knowledge and broaden their mind.
For example
 ,
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a lesson
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lesson
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lessons
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 like history or biology could be
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thought-provoking
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thought provoking
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thought-provoking
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 and helps
students
 know more about the history of the country or
local
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, biology helps
students
 explore
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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 ,
behaviour
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the behaviour
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 of insect and what they eat
? .
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Finally
, all these acquired skills would help them in future to be a more successful person In conclusion,
while
 there are valid arguments for both approaches, I believe that a balanced approach that combines
focus
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study
in
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on
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 the main
subject
 with
explore
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an exploration
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 of different
subjects
 is the most beneficial.
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task response
coherence cohesion
lexical resource
grammatical range

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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