Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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A faction of people believe that success mantras cannot be taught
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educational academics.
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to academics, many
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like
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cooperation
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team work
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can
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be learned at those institutions. With that being, I
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partially agree with the viewpoint of the abovementioned individuals because our society
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plays a major role. Our education system
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us in fostering habits that are paramount in achieving our life goals. What I mean, is that
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mandatory attendance, group projects ,
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activities are responsible for developing
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behavioral
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tendencies.
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, respecting
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and regulation of schools make us disciplined.
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assignments and participating in athletic activities and
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competition helps in cultivating
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spirit, leadership skills ,
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hard work
and discipline. Since a successful person
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all of the above skills, acquiring those traits increases our chances of being successful. As a
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, without
schools
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it will be an
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pursuit to engrain those traits in us, which denotes the importance of academies in nurturing the qualities of a successful person.
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parents
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contribution cannot be ignored. All habits, regardless of
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impact, are crucial to
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a successful personality and
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, to
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extend
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, are accountable for fostering those habits.
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, despite being good in academics and
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, students can develop a destructive habit of spending more time on video games. The leisure time, in turn, could change into incessant gaming addiction; thereby,
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in prioritizing virtual gaming
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of participating in outdoor
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.
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,
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will have repercussions in learning
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team work
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and
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cooperation
which comes
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engaging in
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.
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, it could be argued that
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parents
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supervision is necessary to keep a close eye on
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behaviors
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which are detrimental to their children's future outlook. Considering the above, I strongly agree that schools and universities
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an important role
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in the skills of dedication, persistence and
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collaboration. With that being said,
parents
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play a part by keeping an eye on the development of any disruptive daily routine, which are not in sync with the future goals of their pupils.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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