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The bar chart on the right shows figures of annual coffee and meat consumption.

The bar chart on the right shows figures of annual coffee and meat consumption.
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The given horizontal bar chart compares the number of
coffee
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 and
meat
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 consumed in certain
countries
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Overall
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, obviously from the diagram the USA is the biggest consumer of
meat
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whereas
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Norway
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 is the largest customer of
coffee
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.
By contrast
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, in Asian
countries
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, both products are consumed the least. It is clear from the data that 122
kg
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 per
person
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meat
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 consumption was recorded in the USA and it is the highest indicator among all
countries
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. Next,
meat
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-eating is in European states
such
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 as Germany, France and
Norway
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 with 87, 72 and 60 kilograms per
person
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. The remaining
countries
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 (China, Russia and Japan) have a value in the range of 42 to 47
kg
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 on a citizen. Of all given
countries
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 China has the lowest index of
meat
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 eating. In comparison to
meat
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,
coffee
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 has low values in all
countries
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 in the chart and the highest of them is 9
kg
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 per
person
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 in
Norway
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.
However
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, Germany is not too far and their
coffee
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 use amounts to 7kg per
person
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. Similar figures in France and Russia are equal to 5kg of citizens.
Moreover
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, the US rate is just below 1
kg
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. The
countries
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 with the smallest kilogramms per
person
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 are Japan and China. Their score is almost thrice lower than
Norway
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's values (2kg and 3
kg
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 per
person
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, meat, countries, norway, kg, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual consumption
  • millions of tonnes
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady increase/decrease
  • per capita consumption
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • economic factors
  • cultural preferences
  • global market
  • demand and supply
  • statistics
  • kilograms per annum
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