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You are studying overseas. You need to return to your country before the end of the semester for a family event. Write a letter to your supervisor. In your letter - request time off - explain why you need to leave early - reassure him/her that your studies will not suffer

#country #semester #event #supervisor #request #time #studies
Dear Mrs. Anya Hope you and your family in Bali are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to request some time
of
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 before the semester is complete, regarding my
brother
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brother's
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 wedding in Indonesia. I have to go one week before the marriage to prepare
the
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for the
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 wedding and help him through emotional support.
Furthermore
, my Father
are
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 not in good condition, so I need to visit him in Hospital. In total, I need 2 weeks before coming back to College. I will assure you that I will not
left
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leave
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 my studies behind, Surya will help me to discuss the lecture
while
 I'm in Indonesia. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours, Sincerely Hendra
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task response
Provide more specific details about your brother's wedding and your father's condition to make your reasons more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more coherently by using separate paragraphs for each point.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary by using more varied phrases and expressions.
grammatical range
Proofread your letter to fix grammatical errors and improve sentence structures.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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