It is fact that the majority of people who are sent to prison commit further crime after their release. What causing this? What can be done to change this?

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task response
Ensure that you fully address all aspects of the given task. Discuss the causes of prisoners committing crimes after their release and also provide actions to prevent this.
coherence cohesion
Work on the organization and structure of your essay. Make sure you have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and supporting details.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more varied and precise language to convey your ideas. Avoid repetitive or basic vocabulary.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and grammar. Make sure your sentences are grammatically accurate and varied. Use a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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