Some people say that the articular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important main environmental problem of our time is the loss of p environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from nowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

While
it is true that
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environmental
problems
are seriously
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affecting
effecting
our life, there has been a consensus among the public that
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currently
the greatest
enviromental
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environmental
problems
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of humanity is
extinction
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the extinction
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of
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a number
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of species of
plants
or animals.
In contrast
, another group of people uphold the idea that
this
is not simply true and we encounter
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problems
.
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will consider both
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reasons and will provide my personal point of view. The
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environmental
problems
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always our most emergent issues of all time.
Plants
and
animals
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animals'
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ecosystem is one of the most
importat
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important
asset of our planet
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and without
it
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it,
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our life are in danger. Take the Indian Lion
for example
, when
this
specific
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species
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extinct the whole
eco system
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ecosystem
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of India was in
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emergency
sitation
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situation
.
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Simply
because
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there
was no lion to hunt fox and Wolf and
number
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of
foxs
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foxes
and wolves surged and with
this
several other species like rabbit and snakes
pushed
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to the edge of
extinction
untill
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until
Indians
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import
number of lions into
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their
there
woodlands and they balanced the ecosystem.
On the other hand
, what
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believe is that with global warming and food shortage and high rates of increasing population,
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we as
humans are at
our
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edge of
extinction
and we should
erge
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urge
merge
our selves
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ourselves
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to solve these
problems
first and
then
we
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think
about
ainimals
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animals
and
plants
. Take
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mouth
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for example
they extinct. Despite all the
plants
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and animals
extinction
we should
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serve
first to
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think
about other species, and as long as there
is
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are
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some
problems
like global warming and food shortage and high rates of
increasing
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the increasing
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population we should not do much about others.
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