the chart below give inormation about usa mariages and divorce rats between 1970 amd 2000

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about marriage and divorce between 1970 and 2000 and the marital of adult in two of years in

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the 30 years and it should be noted that

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of married was always

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decreased from 1970 to 2000 drooping from 2.5m to 2m

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between 1970 and 2000

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both years almost 70

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in 1970 and 60

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in 2000. the

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from 1970 to 2000 rising from almost 11

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to 20

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the amount of it was almost

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presents minimal growth

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1970 to 2000 going up from 1

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the chart below give inormation about usa mariages and divorce rats between 1970 amd 2000

Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion

The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. Ask for time off and explain why. Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work. Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence.