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the chart below give inormation about usa mariages and divorce rats between 1970 amd 2000

the chart below give inormation about usa mariages and divorce rats between 1970 amd 2000
#inormation #usa #mariages #divorce #rats #amd
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are
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our
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barcharts
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bar charts
illustrats
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illustrates
datas
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data
 about marriage and divorce between 1970 and 2000 and the marital of adult in two of years in
USA
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the USA
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Overall
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Over
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all
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 it can be seen that the
figure
 for marriages and
divorced
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had
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decreased
for
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 the 30 years and it should be noted that
figure
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the figure
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 for
percentage
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the percentage
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 of married was always
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higher
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higher
 than
other
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the other
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 figures By looking at the first chart, the
figure
 for marriages has
slight
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 decreased from 1970 to 2000 drooping from 2.5m to 2m
while
 the
figure
 for divorces
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 between 1970 and 2000
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second
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chart
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 the
figure
 for married was
highest
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the highest
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 and it reached a
pick
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peak
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at
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 both years almost 70
percent
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per cent
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 in 1970 and 60
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000. the
figure
 for never married shows a gentle
increased
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 from 1970 to 2000 rising from almost 11
percent
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per cent
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 to 20
percent
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per cent
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. The number of widowed was almost at same number in two both
time
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times
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 the amount of it was almost
around8
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around
percent
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figure
 for
divorced
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divorce
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 presents minimal growth
in
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from
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 1970 to 2000 going up from 1
percent
 to around 10
percent
.
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