As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance.  Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

With the increase
of
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global trade, numerous
items
including the
items
that we use in our daily routine are made in other
nation
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nations
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and have to be delivered
in
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over
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long
distance
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distances
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. In my opinion,
the
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online shopping from other countries is a good thing as long as the
quality
of the
products
is better than the local
items
.
Firstly
, the
quality
of these
products
is high and can not be produced locally.
Therefore
,
the
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customers prefer buying goods globally. To illustrate, many users around the world are buying Apple
products
because they do not have the same
quality
of phones in their country.
Secondly
, the price of the
items
from foreign
country
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countries
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is much cheaper than local
items
due to
the cost of production. People may find the same product with the same
quality
but the price is lower which makes them buy from online shopping from other nations.
On the other hand
, the shipment time is frustrating. The customer may spend three weeks to one month waiting for the
products
to be delivered.
This
issue may reduce the number of users which eventually
impact
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the income of the company.
For example
, Amazon sales increased significantly when they improved their
delievery
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delivery
time.
However
, many companies struggle with the
delievery
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delivery
time and their customers may start to buy local
items
from their country rather than waiting for weeks. In conclusion, I strongly agree that buying
items
from other countries is better than buying locally
becuase
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because
both
quality
and price
is
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better.
However
, in most
cases
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the shipment may take over three weeks which is frustrating for customers.
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