The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

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The table below provides

visual

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representation of the origins of the funds,

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the pie charts depict the manner in which it was allocated in 2017 and 2018 in a special area in Britain.

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, the highest police budget source was prepared by

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the national

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government in both two years,

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the total number of funds was more in 2018 by a narrow margin. The salaries of officers and

staffs

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ranked first in terms of money

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disbursed.

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the table, the most significant

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budget

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the budget

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was paid by

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which was responsible for 175.5m and 177.8m in 2017 and 2018, respectively. There was little difference between the shares of other sources grants in 2017 and 2018, as the former was 38m,

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the amount of the latter was 0.5m higher. The pie charts illustrate that salaries distribute

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amount of

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to themselves, which accounted for 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018, respectively. Buildings and transport ranked second with a similar share of 17% in both years.

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amount was almost twice as high as that of technology in 2017 (merely 8

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the share of money allocated to technology was 3% less in 2018 in

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area of Britain.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

204 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

budget allocation
funding sources
government policies
economic conditions
community services
crime prevention
public safety
significant increase/decrease
distribution
assessment
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allocation shifts
budget comparison
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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

In many countries, the level of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

in some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building their living. what are the reasons for this? how can people research this?