The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table below provides
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representation of the origins of the funds,
while
the pie charts depict the manner in which it was allocated in 2017 and 2018 in a special area in Britain.
Overall
, the highest police budget source was prepared by
national
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the national
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government in both two years,
while
the total number of funds was more in 2018 by a narrow margin. The salaries of officers and
staffs
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ranked first in terms of money
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disbursed.
According to
the table, the most significant
amounts
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of
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was paid by
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which was responsible for 175.5m and 177.8m in 2017 and 2018, respectively. There was little difference between the shares of other sources grants in 2017 and 2018, as the former was 38m,
whereas
the amount of the latter was 0.5m higher. The pie charts illustrate that salaries distribute
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amount of
budget
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to themselves, which accounted for 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018, respectively. Buildings and transport ranked second with a similar share of 17% in both years.
This
amount was almost twice as high as that of technology in 2017 (merely 8
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),
while
the share of money allocated to technology was 3% less in 2018 in
this
area of Britain.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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