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tusks as they want. And one of the main advantages of video
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money for developers. The second disadvantage is that
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addicted and they play all the time. No sports or education in their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socioeconomic factors
  • poverty
  • unemployment
  • dysfunctional families
  • parental guidance
  • peer pressure
  • substance abuse
  • lenient laws
  • weak enforcement
  • legal system
  • law enforcement
  • media influence
  • desensitize
  • glorification of crime
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