the map below shows an industerial area in the town of Norbiton,and planned future development of the site

The two maps illustrate Norbiton industrial area, in its current form and its proposed expansion.

It is clear that

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the plan is to extend roads to make the area more convenient for transportation.

Also

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, all the factories will be replaced by housing and other

centres

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. There are no plans to change the town.

According to

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the maps, the most noticeable change from the current layout to the proposed plan is that there will no longer be companies after work has been done.

This

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is achieved by demolishing all the factories which are around the roundabout and around the road toward the east, and

this

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field will be allocated to develop roads, construct new houses, educational and recreational

centres

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. Regarding the road’s developments, new roads will be constructed toward the west and north, and one small roundabout will be built in the middle of Southern Avenue.

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, a new bridge will be constructed for access to housing and farmland. In terms of new

centres

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, a playground and school will be built in the west of the area beside three new housing.

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, on the top of the southern avenue, two new

centres

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, namely shops and medical will be constructed, which will be accessible from any direction.

Moreover

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, some new housing will be built in the north and northeast, one of them will have a spectacular view of the river and will be surrounded by farmland.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centres with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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235 words

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