some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one. Give reasons for your answers and give relevant examples from your experience.

Is it right to say that the use of mobile
phones
in
schools
should be completely banned? As a matter of fact, many a man more often than not believe that restriction on using mobile
phones
in
schools
is a constructive development.
While
few reckons that it has downsides
also
. In my opinion, handheld
devices
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a lot of perks if they are
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correctly,
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it can be the
time
killing discovery. The upcoming paragraphs will shed light on having cell
phones
pros and cons with suitable
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. To start with, cell
phones
are not known as the world in the pocket for no reason. It is an inevitable fact that by having mobile
phones
users can feel they have access to the all over world.
Similarly
, by having
internet
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connection to personal
devices
students
will feel like they can access all types of knowledge within a few seconds.
Therefore
, it helps them to understand the course modules by providing not only visual effects but
also
advanced knowledge.
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, in Japan most of the
schools
allow children to bring mobile
phones
to study the
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concepts of their course material and
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93% of these
students
pass their program without taking study drop.
Hence
, it is constructive development to take mobile
devices
at educational institutes. On the
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head, mobile
phones
have the drawbacks of
time
killing. Predominantly, If mobile
phones
are not
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used by
students
for study purposes,
then
there is a tendency
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in a negative way. So school teachers complain
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higher authorities to
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the use of mobile
phones
because
studets
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students
are majorly engaged towards social media activities. They are more fascinated towards
the
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reel creation and uploading content on the internet.
This
procedure
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a lot of
time
and distracts them from their studies as well. India is the epitome of facing the negative consequences of allowing
students
to take mobile
phones
to
schools
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. More than half of the youth were inclined towards getting overnight fame on the internet by posting their videos on Tiktok during the pandemic;
due to
that government banned Tiktok in India.
Therefore
, usage of
such
devices
should be under surveillance or completely banned in
schools
. To recapitulate, without any doubt, it can be asserted that when mobile
devices
are used by the productive mindset,
then
there will be a revolution in the education industry which leads to
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economically stable society;
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mobile
devices
are the
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weapons for
students
.
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