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The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
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the pie chart illustrates the amount of
money
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 spent on seven different services (food, car, petrol, restaurant, furniture, computers and
book
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books
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) in 1966
of
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by
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USA
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the USA
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 people.
Overall
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, in the USA,
money
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use
Wrong verb form
used
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 for food accounts for the highest
propotion
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proportion
.
By contrast
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,
the
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in the
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 USA people almost use less
money
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 to buy computers. In 1966, the vast majority of
money
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is
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was
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 used for food and took up around 44% of the total percentages of expenditure on all items.
Besides
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, the American People
also
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 spent
lot
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a lot
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 of
money
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 on cars, and the amount of
money
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 used for
this
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 demand made up 23%. Turning to the remaining items, we can see that the percentages of expenditure on petrol, restaurant, furniture and book accounts for 9%, 7%, 10% and 6% respectively. Computers were
sector
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the sector
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 that used
lowest
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the lowest
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 with 1%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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