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The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home or work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?v

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Nowadays, the crowded megacities and
traffic
 congestion in them
has
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 become a big problem for citizens to deal with. Some experts believe
,
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the
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 fewer individuals utilize
transport
 vehicles for their daily routine the freer spaces would be on
streets
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the streets
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. In
this
 essay,
although
 there are a few problems with the approach, I will explain why I agree with the solution. The human population is growing
with
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 a high rate globally.
Consequently
, the demand for more shopping
centers
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centres
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 and
traveling
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travelling
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 and education facilities is rising. With
now
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more cars and
transport
 vehicles available compared to previous decades, people are getting used to
this
 way of
transport
in
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 an unstoppable rate.
As a result
, the streets would always be busy and crowded.
Thus
, many social experts suggest that if it
was
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 not
because of
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 mass car production, cities would definitely be
more quiet
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 and less congested. By expanding digital ways of communication and transportation, humans could enter a new era in which except for necessary situations nobody would look for
transport
 vehicles.
For example
, online shopping in many developed countries has significantly decreased the tendency of individuals to buy
stuffs
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stuff
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 in person.
Thus
, there is
not
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a
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need
for going
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to go
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 outside of
home
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the home
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 and using cars or busses.
Moreover
, ambulances and police personnel could easily move and do their duties as fast as possible in a
solitude
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 space.
On the other hand
, there are other ways which should be considered too.
For instance
, developing new facilities for transportation which use other passes like Tunnels and even airborne taxis could be effective too.
For example
, Elon Musk,
the
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 well-known entrepreneur is working on underground tunnels and fast railways in Los Angeles City in order to overcome the immense
traffic
 of the city. In
conclusion
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peoples
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people
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 in many cities all around the world are suffering from
traffic
 and the issue is growing
by
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every day. From my perspective, investing in new ways of communication and transportation between humans combined with developing advanced and different routes for
transport
 could solve the
traffic
 issue
once
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forever.
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