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You have recently read a newspaper article about your school friend whom you did not hear about for a long time. Write a letter to the newspaper editor highlighting some article details. Ask for some information about your friend.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to inquire about my friend, Mr.Smith Brown, a medical officer, for whom I read a blog in your yesterday's newspaper.
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let me explain to you how I know him and why I need his contact details. Well, we were in the same school from grade 1 to grade 8, and we used to share a plethora of things when we were children as we were good friends.
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 to
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, we were living in the same
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, so we were known to each other's families too. Unfortunately, when his mother died in a road accident a few years ago, his father settled in another city with all his family members, including Smith. Since
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, I have neither heard from him nor visited our town. Believe me, it gave me immense joy when I saw his picture in the newspaper. I read his story about how he has helped deprived people more than three times. I feel proud to see my friend helping the poor and needy for free and bringing happiness to their lives.
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, I tried to search for any other information so I could contact him;
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, I was not able to get it. The reason for
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 letter is to acquire the relevant information so I can call or see him. I would appreciate it if you could please provide me with his phone number or email address, so I can be in touch with him. If you are not allowed to share personal information, please provide his current office or residential location. I look forward to a positive response from you. Yours faithfully, Sohel Khan
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task response
The letter adequately addresses the task but lacks some key details about the article and could benefit from a more specific request for information about the friend.
coherence cohesion
The organization of the letter is clear, and paragraphs are well-structured. However, the use of transitions could further improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The letter uses a range of vocabulary, but it could benefit from more precise and varied language to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
The writer demonstrates a good command of grammar, but more complex sentence structures and a variety of grammatical forms would enhance the grammatical range.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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