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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The map illustrates significant changes in
Pardaise
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Paradise
 Island from past times to
actuallity
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actually
actuality
.
Overall
, the isle developed substantially from an isolated site to a
holliday
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holiday
 settlement over the course of the years.
Likewise
, infrastructure and amenities increased
along with
 the isle's capacity to provide for tourists. In the past, there was only one building standing
in
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 the whole island,
this
 was the Scientific Research Station.
Nevertheless
, the place does count with a huge area of natural spring to the left of the mentioned construction.
Also
, the depiction shows a pier and a boat located
at
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in
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 the western part of the islet. At
the
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apply
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present, the islet's general distribution has suffered some changes which are probably related to the uprising number of tourists that find
these kind
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this kind
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 of places appealing.
As a result
, many infrastructures were focused on the satisfaction of the visitors.
For example
, there is now a hotel complex located
at
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in
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 the western part, which contains a swimming pool. In the
center
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centre
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, an open restaurant has been constructed and a café has been placed in the western part.
To sum up
, the island seems to modernize in the selected time period to cater for tourists.
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