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Task 1 The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Task 1 The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar
char
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chart
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 displays information about production and
consuption
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consumption
 of
electricity
 in 2014 for peak ten countries. Calibration of
electricity
 done in
billion
KWh
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kWh
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.
Overall
,
China
 is the main producer of
electricity
 and Korea, Rep is the
miner
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 producer.
Rest
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The rest
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 of
other
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the other
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 countries
are fluctuating
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in
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between the said two countries.
However
, the US
obtain
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obtained
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the seconf
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seconf
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second
 major
genrator
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generator
 of
the
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apply
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electrical power.
As well as
,
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apply
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of
electricity
also
show
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shows
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 the same
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Accordingly
,
China
 and the US are the
top
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apply
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main consumers of generated electrical power.
To begin
 with, the maximum generation is 5.398
billion
KWh
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kWh
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 in
China
while
United
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the United
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States
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States is
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 responsible for 4,099
billion
KWh
. The same
insident
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incident
 can be observed for
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the consuption
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consuption
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consumption
 of electrical energy.
Because
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apply
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China
 consumes 5.322
billion
KWh
 and
United
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the United
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 States
consuption
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consumption
 was 3,866
billion
KWh
. Among those ten
contries
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countries
,
Korea
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Korea's
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 Rep.
was showing
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showed
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 the least
consuption
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consumption
 and production. The graph obviously
providing
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provides
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 the details of
main
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the main
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 ten
contries
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contries'
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behavior
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behaviour
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 of energy usage and production in 2014.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consuption, electricity, billion, kwh, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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