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You have just read an article in a national newspaper whcih claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other, you don't fully agree with this opinion.

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My name is Shoaib Mehmood, I am from Karachi. I am writing
this
 letter to share my
opnion
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opinion
 on the article which
had
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 published
last
 week in your newspaper which claimed that all
town
 centers are
same
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the same
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 in our country.
Although
,
i
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 found that article very informative in terms of knowledge
but
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i
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 have
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a difference
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difference
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of
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opinion on some facts.
Firstly
 you talked about the infrastructure which looks similar in
majority
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the majority
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 of our
town
center
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centre
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 which is true, most of them
has
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same
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 standard of infrastructure like broader roads, high rise buildings,
shoppings
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shopping
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 malls etc.
Secondly
, you emphasized
on
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attractions for tourists where
i
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 think differently that not all of our
town
center
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centers
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 have
same
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 collection of attractions,
such
 that the
town
 centre where
i
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 used to live has far more sight
seeings
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seeing
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 than other
town
centers
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centres
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 of our country, as it has a strong heritage which makes
is
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it
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 more attractive for visitors and makes a huge different than the others. You are
cardinaly
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cardinal
cardinally
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 invited to come and visit our
town
center
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, i will be your guide to make
this
 tour
fruiteful
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fruitful
 and full of information. Yours Faithfully,
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coherence cohesion
Your letter contains relevant points but lacks clarity and strong examples to support your opinion. You also need to work on the logical structure of the content in order to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have addressed the prompt but need to provide clearer and comprehensive ideas with relevant examples. Work on providing a complete response to fully address the task.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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