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If a person is found to be under the influence of drugs or alcohol while driving, they should be banned from driving for life, whether they were involved in an accident or not. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #influence #drugs #alcohol #life #accident
If an individual appears to have been impacted by the use of
drugs
 or liquor when driving, one's driving licence needs to be prohibited throughout their
lives
 whether an accident has been caused by them or not. I strongly agree with
this
 statement because it
also
 affects the security of the public
as well as
 individual safety. It is very important for road users to behave in an ethical manner to ensure public protection. The driver's behaviour directly affects the community if they drive vehicles after consuming alcohol or
drugs
. The substances are a major
obstaclefor
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obstacle for
obstacle
 reducing
concentration
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the concentration
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 of the driver.
Therefore
,the public has a huge risk from
this
 kind of road
users
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user
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.
For example
,there are a
numver
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number
 of incidents
happen
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happening
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such
 as deaths on roads
due to
 careless drunken
people
 who ride vehicles. Because of
this
,it is a wise decision
of
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to
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forbiting
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forbid
 the permit of driving throughout the soul. It is not a matter
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of that
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that
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whether
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 they have
done
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had
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 an accident or not. Better to consider
about
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apply
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the current effects of
alchol
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alcohol
consuming
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consumption
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.
On the other hand
,driving after having alcohol or
drugs
 greatly affects
the
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apply
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self- security
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self-security
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 as well.
Due to
 less attention and
over- confidence
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over-confidence
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,
spontaniously
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spontaneously
 a number of
people
 drag their
lives
to
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into
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 danger.
For instance
,
the
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people
 cannot make judgements clearly if they have the influence of
drugs
 or
liquar
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liquor
.
Hence
, the cancellation of licence is a crucial to prevent hazards which affect
the
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apply
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lives
.
To conclude
, it is very important to ban driving
in
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for
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 whole life if
people
 take alcohol or
drugs
 when driving without considering anything. They do not need to be met with an accident to cancel the permit
beacuse
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because
aocoholism
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alcoholism
 or
effects
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the effects
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 of
substances
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substance
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 abuse is a major factor
of
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in
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threatning
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threatening
own
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their own
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lives
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life
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as well as
the
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apply
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community protection.
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