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Some people believe that childhood is the happiest time of your live. To want extent, do you agree ?

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People have different views of their
childhood
 and many of them have various stories of the unhappiest in their
lives
.
However
 others have their own happier
childhood
 story in their
lives
, and it certainly can
give
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positive
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 impact on their mental health in the future.
This
 essay will discuss perspectives and draw a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, many people have
childhood
happiest
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stories with their family, especially with parents.
Children
 will get more close observations compared to
adult
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.
For example
 ,
children
 in elementary school can always get attention from their parents and family in the environment. So, they find it happier and
saver
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.
On the other hand
, other
children
 want to be happy in
childhood
, but they can not feel it because
of
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some problems from their family background
has
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 a considerable impact on their real
lives
.
For example
, currently, many
children
 are abandoned by their parents to become a beggar on the side of the road or the poor
family
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 economic background make them
to
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work to support their own. In conclusion, even though
childhood
 can be
happiest
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the happiest
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 time in personal
lives
, many others experience difficulties in their
childhood
 time.
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