The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph provides information on the
quantity
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number
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of
households
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in the USA by annual earnings in three different years, exactly in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, a quite
big
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large
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number of
households
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in
US
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the US
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which earned 50,000 – 99,999, remained almost stable in these given years. Those, which earned money were 49,999 million or less, experienced considerable changes during these periods.
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the housekeeping’s incomes with 100,000 million or more were quite different
in
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apply
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each year. In 2007, the majority of
households
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(around 30
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millions
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million
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) pocketed 100,000 or larger,
also
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about 50
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millions
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million
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of them had incomes starting 49,999 or below
of
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apply
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it
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. Slightly more than 20
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millions
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million
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earned 50,000-74,999,
whereas
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almost 15
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millions
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million
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of USA
households
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got 75,000-99,999. After 4 years, 49,999 and less was earned by 30
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millions
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million
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of them. The group, which proceeds
was
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were
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100,000 or above, decreased faintly to around 28
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millions
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million
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.
While
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a
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the
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quantity
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number
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of
housekeepings
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housekeeping
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within
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with
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income from 50,000 to 74,999 remained constant, on the bottom of the list were the
households
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(less than 15
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millions
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million
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) with earnings between 75,000-99,999. In the
last
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year of the chart, the highest income was a group of over 30 million which made money 100,000
and
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or
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more.
A
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The
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number of
households
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with 74,999 or less money did not experience a significant change, and the lowest income group’s number rose steadily to exactly 15
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millions
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million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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