Today,many people do not know their neighbours in large cities.What problems does this cause?What can be done about this?

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people
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which
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leads they do not anything about
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life
or about the
people
around them,not except their
neighbours
.That problem can have a negative impact on their
life
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the technology.But it can be solved by
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the
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go outside
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than
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at home. First of all,we must know why
people
always
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phone
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that on the Internet,there are many
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news and it
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them watch it until
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night.Another reason is they
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of missing the news or something helpful and it
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them try to scroll down to find
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.So that
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the
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they do not know their
neighbours
or the
people
around them.
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,in some Asian countries,they are addicted to their
phone
and it
cause
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when they go outside,they
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not know who are their
neighbours
and it can make the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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feel that you
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do not respect
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them. But that problem can be fixed that
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reduce the
time
to
use
the technology.You can make a plan to
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work or study.In the
21
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21st
century,many apps are being used to improve the
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people
use
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on
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phone
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phones
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.Take
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the
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for
instances
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,they
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an app that you set the
time
the
phone
can not turn on any entertaining apps,so the
people
can go outside to meet their new
neighbours
.
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technology is the best equipment
to learn
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for learning
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a new knowledge
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but it can become the thing that
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you miss
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life
.But you can fix that by
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less
time
and
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it for
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study or your work and it can be
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helpful facilities help your
life
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better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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