The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the
percentage
of macronutrients in the average diet
, the healthy diet
and the healthy diet
for sport
.
Overall
, the cellulose is the highest rate in both healthy diets. While
the fat proportion is the lowest among the protein and glucose proportion in all provided diets. Additionally
, in the average diet
both sugar and Add a comma
diet,
protien
have the same bonus.
Correct your spelling
protein
The cellulose
is the highest interest in the healthy Correct article usage
Cellulose
diet
and the healthy diet
for sport
with 50% and 60% respectively. In the same two healthy diets
the protein Add a comma
diets,
percentage
is higher in the general healthy diet
with
30% Change preposition
at
while
25% for the Correct word choice
and
sport
. Moreover
, the fat percentage
in the healthy diet
for sport
is lower than the general healthy diet
with 15% and 20% respectively.
In the average diet
, the only diet
that have
both Change the verb form
has
protien
and carbohydrates Correct your spelling
protein
share
the same proportion Correct subject-verb agreement
shares
with
40% each. Change preposition
of
However
, the remaining percentage
is fat with 20%.Submitted by ft00m_309 on
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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