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Today food often travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only ate food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this idea outweigh the disadvantages?

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to have
food
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 produced
in
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 local farms or not. In
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essay
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 I am going to examine
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 question from both points of view
an
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and
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then
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 explain why I believe that
food
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 must be produced
in
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 local farms.
Firstly
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, there are people who argue that the benefits of shipping
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 from overseas considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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,
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 is that many
fruits
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 and vegetables need certain conditions to grow in. It is possible to say that certain kinds of
vegetable
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 need
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 form of skill and a specific type of soil. To illustrate, papaya
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 and dragon
fruits
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 can not grow in European countries
due to
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 cold-moderate weather conditions.
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, these
fruits
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 need specific
kind
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kinds
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 of
skilled-workers
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 to plant them.
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, others believe that
food
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 should be planted locally. People have
this
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 opinion because
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 the prices will be lower and
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 will offer many job opportunities for the people. A second point is that local farms will benefit the economy because the taxes will be lower and
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 will lead
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to a
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higher buying force for
such
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 goods. A good example
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,
in
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 Saudi Arabia,
most
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where most
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 plants and vegetables are now planted locally
this
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 has led to lower taxes on local farmers, ease of farm construction, and
thus
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 lower product prices. In conclusion, I
beleive
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believe
 both arguments have their reasons. On balance,
however
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, I feel that plants should be produced locally
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 because
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 will help the economy and offer many job opportunities.
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