The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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what UK

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graduates and master's degree

students

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did after graduation (excluding full time-work) in 2008.

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, it can be seen that most of the undergraduate and postgraduate

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decided to continue higher education

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while

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taking a part-time job and becoming unemployed had similar figures.

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, joining volunteer activities was the

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option for the graduates. Continuing higher education was the first option for

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in both degrees since the number was the highest compared to others. There were almost 30.000 undergraduate

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and 2,725 master's degree

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who were continuing their studies.

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, 17,735 undergraduate

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took part-time jobs that the number was higher than postgraduate learners which was 2,535. Looking back at the graph,

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there was a huge gap number in the unemployment group between both degrees. There were 16,000 undergraduates,

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the other ones were 1,625.

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, joining volunteer activity had the lowest figure in both types of

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. There were only 3,500 undergraduates and no more than 400 postgraduates.

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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Today more and more people want things instantly (e.g.: goods, service, news ). Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people think that spending a lot of money on wedding parties and other celebrations is just a waste. Others, however, think that such events are necessary, so spending money on them is acceptable. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

It is sometimes said that people who do physically hard jobs should be paid as much as those with higher-level qualifications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.