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Many things that used to br done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does the development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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In today’s day, cutting-edge technologies are replacing
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manual
labor
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.
Although
,
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 doing household chores by
hands
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have
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 a huge advantage when it comes to the quality of the
work
,
i
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 think contemporary machines have more benefits than
the
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drawbacks for
majority
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 of reasons. On the one
hand
, smart devices have enough adverse effects
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 human beings.
Firstly
, they are so expensive to buy that lots of people may not afford to themselves. An average salary may not be enough to acquire them, as
the
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cost
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theirs
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are soaring day by day.
Secondly
,
such
 devices use
much
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 electricity.
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, it is simply impossible to use microwave ovens, vacuum cleaners or washing machines without electricity.
Finally
, smart technologies sometimes have noise that may cause
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destruction to
neighbors
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 or even take up lots of
place
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.
As a result
, lack of space might cause
unconvinience
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inconvenience
 to move.
On the other
hand
,
i
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 would argue that the benefits of technologies that replace
hand
work
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 outweigh the drawbacks. Primarily, as they are easy to utilize, residents strike to acquire them, even
they
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 cost incredibly high. Faster
work
 completion comes as the next advantage. People finish their housework twice
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 in comparison to
do
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them
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 by
hand
.
Consequently
, they would have much time for
laisure
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leisure
 activities or even for self-development. The
last
, but not the least benefit of using them in daily life is that they are helpful for women who
work
. As working females are prone to fatigue, by using
such
 developments they obviously have less tiredness or other health problems. In conclusion,
i
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 think that even if there are relevant reasons not to use them, it would be beneficial
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the
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daily life, as they have more benefits rather than drawbacks.
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