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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

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As a result
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 of the development,
English
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, Spanish and Mandarin have become the main
languages
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 in the world.
Due to
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this
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 most underdeveloped and developing
countries
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'
languages
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 have disappeared. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss my point of view related to
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 issue.
To begin
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 with, nowadays
English
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language
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 has taken the lead around the world.
Such
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 as the UK, America and many other Asian
countries
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 mostly
use
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English
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 as their mother tongue. At the same time developing
countries
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 like Sri Lanka, India etc., adopt their own
language
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.
For instance
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, Sri Lankans are the only ones who speak Sinhala. If Sinhala has vanished from the Earth, all the books which written, culture and songs will be buried. Some
languages
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 like Latin have already disappeared.
On the other hand
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, speech is the main medium of communication, if native people
use
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 their own
language
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 when doing business, it will have a positive impact on their dying
languages
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.
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, China hardly
use
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English
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 in their country and when it comes to businesses they mostly
use
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 Mandarin to communicate with each other inside the area. So, these methods can be followed to preserve the native
language
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. In conclusion, recently most of the minor
languages
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 are dying out and
languages
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such
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 as
English
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, Spanish and Mandarin have taken the lead. To prevent
such
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 issues, developing
countries
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 can
use
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 their mother tongue in daily life and teach them as a syllabus in the school
also
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 engage with the government and provide a suitable solution to protect their native tongue.

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Task Achievement
The essay responds adequately to the prompt, but the examples are not clearly connected to the main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally clear, but the introduction and conclusion need further development to provide a more cohesive framework for the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Minority languages
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language revitalization
  • Bilingualism
  • Multilingualism
  • Cultural identity
  • Language preservation
  • Indigenous languages
  • Global diversity
  • Language courses
  • Language death
  • Worldviews
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Inclusive society
  • Economic opportunities
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