The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given three pie charts provide information
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sharing the nutrients in distinct foods.
Overall
,
carbohydrate
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contributed most to the food contents, and
the
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fat made up the smallest part of the chart as the nutrition. First of all, the feature
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into three parts it was consist of average
diet
, healthy
diet
, and healthy
diet
for sport. Each
of
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diet
content has three
type
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of
nutritions
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nutrition
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,
such
as, carbohydrates,
protein
, and fat. As
it
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can be seen, carbohydrates substantially dominated all the
diet
categories followed by
protein
at
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the
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second place,
however
, carbohydrates turn significantly into essentials nutrition, which is accounted for 80% of
healthy
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diet
for
sport
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,
in contrast
, the
protein
in
healthy
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diet
for
sport
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turns into
smallest
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number of needed if compared with
protein
in other contents,
such
as
,
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average
diet
andhealthy
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and healthy
diet
.
On the other hand
,
the
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fat was the least significant part of the
diet
, which
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made up 15% &
20
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and 20
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% of nutrition in the
diet
content respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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