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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The line graph illustrates the number of people, who used public transport for different
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 groups and types of
cities
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 in 2016.
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, it is obvious that the proportion of people’s usage of public transportation in big
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 was higher in all
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 groups
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 than in small
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, except for residents between 61 and 75 years. The percentage of individuals of the
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 group under 15, who used public transport, was at approximately 40 %.But, it began to increase significantly when civilians started to get older and it reached the highest point of almost 65 % in the
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 from 31 to 45.
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 , the figure began to drop sharply and fell to the lowest point of around 10 % in the
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 group between 61 and 75.The group of people, who are more than 76 years old, showed a slight rise to just over 10 %. The index of other
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 fluctuated slightly over the given period by 20 % (from 25 % to 5%).

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