You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
It is considered by some that,
acceptable
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the acceptable
age
for marriage should be minimum
of 21 years but others oppose Correct article usage
a minimum
thet
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that
this
is not a valid criteria
. I agree thatCorrect the article-noun agreement
criterion
,
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apply
the
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apply
people
should get married on or after their 21s because of the
maturity and Change the word
their
the
financial readiness.
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apply
Firstly
, people
at age
21 will be considered as matured
because most of them will be at their graduation or under-graduation level and Replace the word
mature
also
have adequate knowledge about the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, they will be eligible for the marriage. Moreover
, everyone shoud
be Correct your spelling
should
financial
independent to survive in Change the adjective
financially
this
society with respect so, at this
stage
there is more possibility to get Add a comma
stage,
settle
in life. Change the form of the verb
settled
For example
, if a bride is equally educated and earning
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earns
same
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the same
along with
her husband Change preposition
as
then
her family will be financially in good
position.
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a good
On the other hand
, people
married before 21s will face lot
of problems Change the article
a lot
due to
lack of maturity and financial issues. Specifically, it may leads
to divorce Change the verb form
lead
due to
insufficient knowledge of life and circumstances. For instance
, in country side
places parents always prefer child marriages for their Correct your spelling
countryside
daughter
and it may Fix the agreement mistake
daughters
results
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result
to
suicide Change preposition
in
due to
in-laws
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in-laws'
in-law's
harrasment
. On top of it, at Correct your spelling
harassment
this
age
human can not Add a comma
age,
take
correct decisions in their life.
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make
To sum up
, in my opinion, the government should run strict rules to restrict the minimum age
of marriage to 21 then
only people
will concentrate on the
education and career. Change the word
their
For example
, with this
law, the parents will encourage their children to focus more on studies and job
and it Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
also
improves the country's economy.Submitted by ssssss9999 on
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