The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.
This
bar graph illustrates the amount of
labor
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represented in percentages in 5 different work environments
such
as manufacturing, services, agriculture/fishing, construction, and
energy
/
water
in Canada in 1850 and 2020.
Overall
, in 2020, the highest
percentage
of
people
were working in services
while
in 1850 Manufacturing had a great deal
percentage
. In 2020, Agriculture/Fishing and
Energy
/
Water
had the lowest amount of inhabitants in
labor
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. The
Energy
/
water
industry
had the least amount of employees in 1850 whilst the majority of
people
were working in manufacturing in that given period. In 1850, the manufacturing business was the biggest
industry
with 36%.
However
, over the next centuries, employees from Canada had a steep decline
this
that
industry
with an
overall
percentage
of only 9% in 2020.
Also
, Agriculture/Fishing noticed a major decline in
percentage
going from 22% in 1850 to only 1% in 2020.
In contrast
, the
percentage
of
people
working in services substantially increased from 1850 to 2020, 33% and 81% respectively. The
Energy
/
water
industry
had the least number of
people
employed in 1850 and 2020.
This
was 3% in 1850 and declined to only 1% in 2020.
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