The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
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The bar graph gives information about how many percentages of woman school-leavers have gone into higher education in different countries in the years 1980 and 2015. In general,
it is clear that
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all countries have recorded better results in 2015 than in 1980 and more and more female associates have gone to University.
Moreover
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, it is worth noting that four countries, namely the UK, the USA, Australia and France have been dominant figures in 2015
while
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Australia reached high grades in both periods.
However
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, South Korea has shown the reverse. As described in the graph, in 1980, Great Britain school-leavers were about 35% and
then
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the trend a significant increase of about 55% in 2015.Similar standing at over 40%
initially
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, the number of USA graduates rose marginally to more than 55%. South Korea had the lowest figure in both periods.
For example
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, in 1980, school leavers were approximately 15% and reached 30% in 2015. Focusing on the France graduates rose to 50% afterwards, it grew negligibly to 55% in 2015.
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but not least, Australia experienced a high trend for two periods, mainly in 1980 the number of graduates was 60%.
However
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,
this
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figure virtually stood steady over the period.
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