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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the current condition and the proposed development of Islip which is the center of a small city. By and large, the city is expected to be fully transformed after changing the layout and addition of new
building
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buildings
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.
Therefore
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 only
school
Correct article usage
the school
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,
park
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, and some
shops
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that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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will remain in the current location.
To begin
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 with, the most noticeable
different
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difference
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 will be on the main
road
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. The straight
road
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 from west to east with two additional
path
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paths
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 to
school
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the school
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 and
park
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 will be changed into
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway surrounding the buildings.
In the
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The
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center
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centre
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 area where there are only
shops
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 and housing will be featured with additional infrastructure
such
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 as
bus
Correct article usage
a bus
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 station,
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a
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big mall,
car
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a car
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park
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, and additional
housings
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housing
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.
moreover
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, the main
road
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 among the
shops
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 will be changed
into
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for
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 pedestrians.
Therefore
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 some city features will
be remained
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remain
have remained
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 in the same location.
School
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The school
A school
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 which is located in the southwest will not be moved but will have a little bit
renovation
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of renovation
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. The
park
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 in the southeast will not be displaced as well but will be minified. The same thing for
shops
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in
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on
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 the east side of the main
road
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, they will not be replaced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, shops, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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