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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the current condition and the proposed development of Islip which is the center of a small city. By and large, the city is expected to be fully transformed after changing the layout and addition of new
building
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buildings
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.
Therefore
 only
school
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the school
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,
park
, and some
shops
that
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apply
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will remain in the current location.
To begin
 with, the most noticeable
different
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difference
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 will be on the main
road
. The straight
road
 from west to east with two additional
path
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paths
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 to
school
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the school
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 and
park
 will be changed into
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway surrounding the buildings.
In the
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The
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center
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centre
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 area where there are only
shops
 and housing will be featured with additional infrastructure
such
 as
bus
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a bus
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 station,
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a
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big mall,
car
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a car
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park
, and additional
housings
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housing
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.
moreover
, the main
road
 among the
shops
 will be changed
into
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for
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 pedestrians.
Therefore
 some city features will
be remained
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remain
have remained
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 in the same location.
School
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The school
A school
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 which is located in the southwest will not be moved but will have a little bit
renovation
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of renovation
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. The
park
 in the southeast will not be displaced as well but will be minified. The same thing for
shops
in
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on
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 the east side of the main
road
, they will not be replaced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, shops, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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