The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people).

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data displays the number of people engaged in various physical activities
such
as Running,
Aerobic
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Aerobics
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, Tennis, Cycling and Swimming between the years 2001-2009 in Australia. The table serves
in
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million
. In general, in
percentage
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the percentage
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of
change
, running is the
most
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biggest
percentage
with 156%
change
in eight years,
meanwhile
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cycling
have
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has
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the lowest
percentage
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of changes
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changes
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change
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with -20%,
event
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even
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though cycling is one of
most
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the most
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favourable sport with more than 3
million
fans. In 2001, the most popular physical
activitiy
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activity
is
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was
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cycling with 4.5
million
enthusiast
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enthusiasts
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, followed by other swimming at 3.7
million
, Aerobics
1.5
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at 1.5
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million
, and running
1.4
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at 1.4
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million
.
However
, the least favorite physical exercise was tennis with only 1
million
enthusiast
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enthusiasts
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. In 2009, running became the
most
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biggest
percentage
change
with 156% and
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a
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slightly
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increase from 1.4
million
in 2001
,
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to 1.5
million
in 2005 and ended with 2.2
million
activis
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active
.
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, cycling fans
are decrease
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are decreasing
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from 4.5
million
in 2001, to 3.1
million
in 2005, and rising to 3.6
million
in 2009.
Moreover
, the
percentage
of
change
is -20% in
past
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the past
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eight years.
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