The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the
money
spent on 5 consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume, and cameras) in the UK
and France
in 2010. The stated amount is in pounds sterling.
Overall
, both countries spent money
on cars the most. The UK
spent the least money
on perfume while
France
on cameras. On average, the British spent their money
the most on these 5 consumer goods.
In terms of cars, the UK
spent around £450.000 while
France
exactly £400.000. The expenditures
Fix the agreement mistake
expenditure
for
books in the Change preposition
on
UK
is slightly above £400.000 on the other hand
France
spent exactly £300.000 on it. The British spent just over £350.000 on cameras in contrast
with the French spent more than 2 times lower
, which was only £150.000.
The amount of expenses for the remaining goods Correct word choice
less
were
higher in Change the verb form
was
France
. In France
, more than £350.000 spent
on computers which Add a missing verb
was spent
slightly
more than in the Add a missing verb
is slightly
UK
who
spent exactly £350.000. In 2010, the Correct pronoun usage
which
UK
spent the least amount of money
in
perfume (slightly lower than £150.000) Change preposition
on
while
France
spent it fro
£200.000.Correct your spelling
for
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