The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main  features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the
money
spent on 5 consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume, and cameras) in the
UK
and
France
in 2010. The stated amount is in pounds sterling. 
Overall
, both countries spent
money
on cars the most. The
UK
spent the least
money
on perfume
while
France
on cameras. On average, the British spent their
money
the most on these 5 consumer goods. In terms of cars, the
UK
spent around £450.000
while
France
exactly £400.000. The
expenditures
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expenditure
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for
Change preposition
on
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books in the
UK
is slightly above £400.000
on the other hand
France
spent exactly £300.000 on it. The British spent just over £350.000 on cameras
in contrast
with the French spent more than 2 times
lower
Correct word choice
less
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, which was only £150.000. The amount of expenses for the remaining goods
were
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was
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higher in
France
. In
France
, more than £350.000
spent
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was spent
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on computers which
slightly
Add a missing verb
is slightly
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more than in the
UK
who
Correct pronoun usage
which
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spent exactly £350.000. In 2010, the
UK
spent the least amount of
money
in
Change preposition
on
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perfume (slightly lower than £150.000)
while
France
spent it
fro
Correct your spelling
for
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£200.000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, uk, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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