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Band 7

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter • say which points in the article you agree with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres • offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir, I read an article in your esteemed newspaper "Time of India" dated 22 June 2023 about an article on the
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centres
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 of my country. The article is well written and explains the aspects of trading
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, shopping and sports complexes, restaurants and bars etc.
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, some information about these
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centres
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 is inappropriate. In my country,
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centres
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 are different in metropolitan cities compared to the rest of the state. The architectural designs of
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centres
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 of New Delhi and Mumbai are similar
whereas
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 the design plans of
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 in Indore and Himachal are unique as these are newly built and provision of stadium in these
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. I would like to offer you a guided tour of my city which will help you to provide accurate details of my
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 so that in future, you will provide correct and authentic information. Since your reputed newspaper is usually read by millions of people relevant information must be published for general public awareness. Yours Sincerely, Amandeep

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Coherence and Cohesion
The letter's structure follows a logical order, but it could be improved by clearly segregating the points you agree with and how your town centre differs from others into separate paragraphs for enhanced clarity.
Task Achievement
The task is only partially achieved as the points made are not fully developed. The candidate needs to expand on the aspects they agree with from the article and provide more specific details about the unique features of their town centre.
Grammatical Range
The candidate should vary their sentence structure more and avoid repeating phrases to improve the flow of the letter. The use of complex structures would enhance the overall quality of the response.
Lexical Resource
The candidate could benefit from using a wider range of vocabulary and more precise expressions to describe their town centre's uniqueness. This would demonstrate a greater lexical resource.
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