You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter • say which points in the article you agree with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres • offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir, I read an article in your esteemed newspaper "Time of India" dated 22 June 2023 about an article on the

town

centres

of my country. The article is well written and explains the aspects of trading

centres

, shopping and sports complexes, restaurants and bars etc.

However

, some information about these

town

centres

is inappropriate. In my country,

town

centres

are different in metropolitan cities compared to the rest of the state. The architectural designs of

town

centres

of New Delhi and Mumbai are similar

whereas

the design plans of

centres

in Indore and Himachal are unique as these are newly built and provision of stadium in these

centres

. I would like to offer you a guided tour of my city which will help you to provide accurate details of my

town

so that in future, you will provide correct and authentic information. Since your reputed newspaper is usually read by millions of people relevant information must be published for general public awareness. Yours Sincerely, Amandeep

Submitted by deep.amans86 on Thu Nov 09 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion

The letter's structure follows a logical order, but it could be improved by clearly segregating the points you agree with and how your town centre differs from others into separate paragraphs for enhanced clarity.

Task Achievement

The task is only partially achieved as the points made are not fully developed. The candidate needs to expand on the aspects they agree with from the article and provide more specific details about the unique features of their town centre.

Grammatical Range

The candidate should vary their sentence structure more and avoid repeating phrases to improve the flow of the letter. The use of complex structures would enhance the overall quality of the response.

Lexical Resource

The candidate could benefit from using a wider range of vocabulary and more precise expressions to describe their town centre's uniqueness. This would demonstrate a greater lexical resource.

2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

167 words

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