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The line graph shows the channel 1 news viewing figures per day in one year.

The line graph shows the channel 1 news viewing figures per day in one year.
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The line chart shows information about how the digital changes in channel one
news
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 viewing trends in the space of one year namely, from January to December. In general, for a bigger part of the period
news
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 at 6
PM
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 had been the most popular among viewers. The
news
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 at 11
PM
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, introduced in May quickly gained popularity and even became the most viewed TV program to watch
news
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. Afterwards, the reverse was true
at the end
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 of the period. As given
the
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in the
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 chart,in January approximately 4.8
million
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 people watched
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news
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the news
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 at 6
PM
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 which is the peak in the entire period. The figure witnessed mild fluctuations and reached around 3.9
million
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 viewers in May. After 6
PM
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 decreased roughly to 3.5
million
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 in August, the stage went up 4
million
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 people when on 1st month Autumn.
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 that, the 6P.m. end of the point reached approximately
to
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3.3
million
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 audience. Of particular note is the fact,
before
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that before
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 9:30
PM
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 witnessed a fall in August, the figure increased significantly to around 3.9
million
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 in May.
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 at 9:30
PM
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 program came back point of before again to 3 millions in December.The channel figure which was introduced to people in May suddenly rose to a chart high to 4.1 in August and
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 dramaticly went down from 4.1 to about 0.9 millions audience
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 the eigth month.
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, it it
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 worth mentioning that, at 1
Pm
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 of viewing fogures witnessed mild fluctuations among about 1.2 millions.
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,
this
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 stage did not change and virtually stood steady untill end of the year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, pm, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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