The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows
percentage
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the percentage
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of the British
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who visit
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visit
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visited
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Cinema
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the Cinema
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in 5
years
range from 1990 to 2010 with 4 different categories of
age
.
Overall
,
cinema
attendance from different categories of
age
tends to have
same
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the same
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pattern every time period. The British who aged 44-54
years
old went to
cinema
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the cinema
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the most with the youngest category (14-24
years
old) is the least to attend the in every period. In 1990, approximately 37% of people
at
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between
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the
age
of 44-54
visit
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visited
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the
cinema
and
finish
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finished
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with the highest point of slightly above 50% of
cinema’s
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cinema
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visitors in 2010. The least visitors
of
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to
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cinema
in 1990 came from people at the
age
of 14-24 with approximately 15% and remained
as
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apply
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the lowest in 2010 with just above 20%. The British from 33-44
years
old in 1990 were the second highest of
cinema
attendees around 35% and
stay
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stayed
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in the same rank in 2010 with above 40%. The second youngest in the
age
category (24-34
years
old) started with more than 20% in 1990 and increased around 10% in 2010 to above 30%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, years, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • anomaly
  • trend
  • pattern
  • attendance
  • cinema-goers
  • audience
  • peak
  • decline
  • increment
  • fluctuation
  • baseline
  • societal changes
  • technological advancements
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • home entertainment
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