The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The map compares Grange
Park
in 1920 with the current time. Several features have moved, but
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main change is the development of an amphitheatre, a
water
feature and the removal of the fountain. Looking at accessibility, the
park
kept
it’s
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two original entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street that have been there since its opening in 1920, but on today’s
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we see they have added underground parking for cars off of Eldon Street as well. In 1920 they chose to have seating placed all around the edge of the
park
,
while
the updated map shows that seating has now been concentrated around the central
park
feature. The same is true of the multiple rose gardens that the
park
originally featured which have now been concentrated into one central rose garden, with only one left in its original location. They kept an entertainment area in the same location in the west of the
park
, though it has been upgraded from a stage to a full amphitheatre. The
park
's
water
attraction, formerly a pond with
water
plants in the
north-east
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corner, has moved and is now a
water
feature where the glasshouse once stood.
While
today’s
park
no longer features the central fountain, it does now include a cafe and children’s play area for visitors to enjoy,
along with
plenty of open space around the features.
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  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
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