The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates information about the
amount
of households in the US by their yearly income in 3 different Change the quantifier
number
years
.
Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
according to
the information in the chart, annual incomes Linking Words
are fall
into the following 5 different categories. Change the verb form
fall
Also
in four Linking Words
Fix the agreement mistake
classes
class
there are fluctuations, Add a comma
class,
while
those who earn 75,000-99,000 annuallyLinking Words
are remain
steady for all Change the verb form
are remained
are remaining
years
In 2015, about 33 million people's annual income hit a high point compared Use synonyms
the
other Change preposition
to the
years
and profits. Use synonyms
Also
between 2007 and Linking Words
2011
there was a significant increase in Add a comma
2011,
figure
of homes which are earn less than 25,000 and 25,000-49,999. Correct article usage
the figure
However
, in 2015 amount of these homes Linking Words
are representing
a decline.
Wrong verb form
represented
All over
the Rephrase
Over
years
, there is number of Use synonyms
household
Change to a plural noun
households
which is
always low. It is the 75,000-99,999 yearly profit one. We can see, it has tiny fluctuations and hits the peak of itself in 2015 with 15 million people.Verb problem
has
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