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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
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 of households in the US by their yearly income in 3 different
years
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the information in the chart, annual incomes
are fall
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fall
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 into the following 5 different categories.
Also
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 in four
Fix the agreement mistake
classes
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class
Add a comma
class,
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 there are fluctuations,
while
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 those who earn 75,000-99,000 annually
are remain
Change the verb form
are remained
are remaining
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 steady for all
years
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 In 2015, about 33 million people's annual income hit a high point compared
the
Change preposition
to the
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 other
years
Use synonyms
 and profits.
Also
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 between 2007 and
2011
Add a comma
2011,
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 there was a significant increase in
figure
Correct article usage
the figure
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 of homes which are earn less than 25,000 and 25,000-49,999.
However
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, in 2015 amount of these homes
are representing
Wrong verb form
represented
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 a decline.
All over
Rephrase
Over
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 the
years
Use synonyms
, there is number of
household
Change to a plural noun
households
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which is
Verb problem
has
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 always low. It is the 75,000-99,999 yearly profit one. We can see, it has tiny fluctuations and hits the peak of itself in 2015 with 15 million people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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